This cap guest stars Ashley from http://ashleyscaps.blogspot.com/ which you should definitely check out of you haven't already.
If this series is too meta for you, let me know. I'm interested in critical comments just as much as I am praise. And either one gets you closer to a free cap series from me as long as its detailed or constructive.
I KNEW IT! I knew he was talking to him self! Of course, i know you sprinkled in clues here and there, but i had thought he was talking to him self before I started. He just seemed like that sort of guy. lol
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed a lot of the stuff you put in this, i don't have any problems with any of it really. But I do enjoy the rough stuff, so...
But the way the story was told, pulled me away from really feeling the anguish and humiliation she felt. I did feel some of it, but it wasn't as powerful reaction as i thought it would be, considering how sick and depraved he was with her.
And.. Cage! I think I have this whole set on my pc, I just fell in love with it when I saw it, but never knew what to do with it. You certainly used it in a very creative and enjoyable way. And the subject matter was really messed up but Again, it felt removed from the victims torment.
I feel like I'm asking a lot of my audience on this one. As with the last couple of The Technologist caps. It's intentionally removed from the victim's torment, but I still want it to be slightly unnerving. Like something unpleasant overheard on a TV in another room.
ReplyDeleteI know it's weird to make caps that aren't 100% squirmtastic, but I think it will pay off in the upcoming series.
Thanks for being honest. This might be one that ends up mostly for my enjoyment. Heh. It's a good thing the last few were so good. I can coast on the anguish fumes...
it wasn't un-enjoyable, I found a lot of stuff in it that I liked. But since you were going for that detached feeling, it feels just like that. But It's not really a bad thing, not every cap has to be squirmy.
ReplyDeleteAnd your welcome, I know I have gushed over your last 3 series caps already, but I couldn't find much of anything wrong with them. Some errors in the text, but I got that in spades for my own work. It didn't pull me out of my enjoyment for them.
Smitty,
ReplyDeleteGreat cap series, and great addition to the story line. I don't know... I think making the story not directly about Ashley's torment was MORE squirmtastic in a way. The fact that she is being used like a piece of furniture while Smitty talks to himself makes it a little more 'oof' to me.
@ Caitlyn. Great. It's good to know it hits people differently. Detached can indeed be very creepy when talking about things as extreme as this like they were model trains.
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed from the start to the end Smitty.
ReplyDeleteThe idea of an interview with you it's quite fascinating, only nitpicky note here, there are some typos here and there, probably because you started to type very fast in the excitement of writing those parts :3...
I have a question for you, if you don't want to answer, don't worry, but why do you include the death matter in some of your caps, sometimes it's creeps me out, do you have to go that far to make a dark oriented cap? :3
Hugs and Kisses Alectra
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ReplyDelete@ Caitlyn
ReplyDeleteI really enjoy that sort of thing and even made a series where I could do just that. But I think it's because She started in the cage, and stayed in the cage.
Any reference to her and what was done to her was told through his retelling of that all. Plus, it seemed like the whole conversation was in his head rather then spoken out loud to an imaginary interviewer.
I know me and you just discussed this, but I wanted to post it here to go a little more detail as to why it felt detached. As I said, I love the way he was treating her and the way she was just a little toy for his pleasure. But it seemed like she was stuck in the cage the whole time, and any of the pictures were just stuff he had already done to her.
@ Alectra. Yeah, I kind of do have to make it that dark. I can't imagine some one regularly turning men into women and getting off on their humiliation not taking it too far eventually. I'd feel like I was cheating if I didn't let Smitty's character evolve, well devolve really.
ReplyDeleteAs for the typos. They are a pain in the ass to copy and paste into a spell checker when you use a bunch of boxes. I guess I should anyway, I'll think about it.
@Jennifer. Yeah there is definitely an element of detachment in the whole thing. The cringe moment is supposed to come when he reveals she's been listening to this whole account of her humiliation and can still feel the overwhelming since of shame of it all.
Whether that comes through with the twist that he's talking to himself, I can't say. But I imagined him alone in a room talking out loud to imagined responses and her cowering in her cage wondering how things could possibly get worse. Which of course, they will.
@ Smitty
ReplyDeleteI only read it once, so maybe I missed it some how. But I didn't pick up on that she could hear all of this. I knew he was talking to him self and i knew he was describing all he had done to her for the last little bit.
but I never got the indication that she could hear him the entire time. I think I could see the extra "Oof" that caitlyn saw if I had known that. The way you both describe it fits the sort of crazy stuff I like to see in caps.
So all of the elements are there in the caption for me to really enjoy it. I just didn't pick up on them as easily as I do for your other work for some reason.
It's possible it's too ambiguous. My love of ambiguity is a double edged sword.
ReplyDeleteooohmmm Smitty...squirmtastic is right...titillating, disturbing, exciting all at once!
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